Week 11 Story: Lying Doesn't Get You Ahead
Seri was a port town with two halves divided by a wide
river. One side was significantly more well to do than the other. The less well
to do side had a lot of rundown houses, but it was not always so derelict.
There was one home which had an implication of wealth, but it no longer showed the
opulence of the past. A merchant, who specialized in the sale of brass, copper,
and tin objects, was walking down the street and soliciting at each home. He
was having almost no luck until he reached the once fancy house. When he knocked
on that door, an elderly woman answered, happy to see him. He started into his
spiel about how his wares were the best in the city and that owning them would
change her life. This woman said that she was in need of some more cooking
equipment. She had to inform him that she could not pay though, because since her
husband’s death, she had become destitute. The merchant said that she could
barter for new cookware. The woman agreed and went off into her house to find something
the trade. She found a dusty bowl that sat up on a shelf, grabbed it, and
brought it back.
When she brought it back the merchant immediately saw that
it was gold and coveted it. She wanted to trade the bowl for a couple of his cookware
items. The merchant, thinking he could take advantage of the woman, scoffed at
the offer and said that the bowl was worth nothing. The merchant promptly left.
Another merchant was making his way around town that day as well. He went up to
the same house and offered to sell some cookware to the lady. She said that she
could not pay and that the only bowl she had to offer was worthless. She
brought out the bowl and showed him. He immediately gasped and told her that not
even all of his wares would equal the value of that bowl. The woman was
incredibly surprised, but she said she really needed some new cooking equipment.
The merchant decided that he would accept the bowl only if the lady would
accept all his wares and the cash, he had from selling that week. She agreed
delighted. The merchant hid the bowl underneath his cloak and started walking. He
passed the other merchant, who was walking back to see the lady. He asked her
if she still had the bowl and said that he was willing to trade something for
it. The lady cackled and said that she had traded it for all the items she
could need. The evil merchant turned and ran after the other merchant, but as
he rounded the corner, he saw the other merchant already on a boat going across
the river.
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Bad Merchant Throwing Golden Bowl. Source |
Author's note:
I really disliked the merchant who attempted to swindle the old woman. I wanted to show him in an even more negative light.
Bibliography
Jataka Tales, Ellen C. Babbitt, Source
John, I really enjoyed your story. I though it was easy enough to read and the flow was really good. From the original story I disliked the merchant as well. It was cool to see how you made him a more negative figure and I think you did an excellent job at it. Good job and I can't wait to read more of your stories.
ReplyDeleteHey there John! I enjoyed this story a lot! The amount of detail that you used was great because it made the reader able to visualize the story. I was engaged in the story all the way through to the end. That's how you know it's a great story. Good Job!!! I can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteHey John, fun story dude, good job. The way you wrote this retelling was very thorough and incredibly packed with detail, which made the story so much more enjoyable. The two paragraphs you broke up our story into with succinct and enjoyable to read. I like the fact that you based yourself off of the way you felt when you read this story. I also disliked the stingy merchant so I'm glad you made him look worse.
ReplyDeleteHi John,
ReplyDeleteI disliked the merchant as well and I am really glad that he did not get what he wanted in the end. However, I really liked your story. I thought that it had a lot of detail and that you did very well to paint the merchant in an even worse light. The story was really easy to follow which made it an enjoyable read as well. Great job!